tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4399739894737228221.post6011860491591275820..comments2010-05-03T13:45:16.635-07:00Comments on Junior Mint, Time Vortexes, & the Hadron Collider: Chapter 18: Revealed IdentitiesUnknownnoreply@blogger.comBlogger14125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4399739894737228221.post-42310358692073719072010-04-15T11:31:53.983-07:002010-04-15T11:31:53.983-07:00Oh my god AWESOME chapter! Extremely action packed...Oh my god AWESOME chapter! Extremely action packed and exciting. I absolutely love how you brought back all the characters like clearing man and billy and gave clearing man a whole other side that we hadn't met yet or even knew existed. Violet is surprisingly bad ass and Im very proud of her. The character descrpitions are fantastic. wonderful job- so excited to see what Billy's deal is. Thanks for sharing!Rosemaryhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00032588273940565358noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4399739894737228221.post-72050000972946103182010-04-15T11:10:30.485-07:002010-04-15T11:10:30.485-07:00This comment has been removed by the author.Rosemaryhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00032588273940565358noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4399739894737228221.post-31687734425541650682010-04-13T20:31:16.748-07:002010-04-13T20:31:16.748-07:00Awesome suspense here.
Thanks too, for the explan...Awesome suspense here.<br /><br />Thanks too, for the explanations. That smoothes out some of this in a good way.<br /><br />It's also good to see where The Clearing Man and Billy came from. Also adds more explanation. <br /><br />Thanks for a great chapter.Zack Thorntonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06608784553169401969noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4399739894737228221.post-26932249722557406102010-04-13T16:14:35.621-07:002010-04-13T16:14:35.621-07:00Haha, Bay Bay...
Violet felt her cheeks grow hot....Haha, Bay Bay...<br /><br />Violet felt her cheeks grow hot. “I took some jiu-jitsu classes in college… it’s nothing.”<br /><br />Shawty’s eyes darkened, his mouth drawing into a fine line. “Yes, well, certain things have changed since…”<br /><br />Gotta love good ol' hapless Dr. Nickel. Full nelson, ouch!<br /><br />“Yes, well, I’ve never had to act like one before now. Must be something about being in an alternate universe,” Violet said, heat rising in her cheeks again.<br /><br />Hans Gerstein! Whoo!<br /><br />Anyways, sorry I haven't written yet guys. I had a big plan for Billy's origins, and I'm trying to figure out how to reconcile it with what Lauren's written here. I'm going to post soon, I hope I'm not totally screwing everything up.Laudlin Preklopnikhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04655705369248092956noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4399739894737228221.post-86560285877429433602010-04-13T14:16:46.168-07:002010-04-13T14:16:46.168-07:00I loved the chapter! Sven's part was particula...I loved the chapter! Sven's part was particularly nice.<br />I liked the way you explained it all. It was interesting and not overwhelming. The ending was also very fun and suspensful!Melissa Hennessyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15400049674860842029noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4399739894737228221.post-34335952151588523622010-04-13T13:02:42.608-07:002010-04-13T13:02:42.608-07:00No, I don't know who was supposed to write, bu...No, I don't know who was supposed to write, but I think this chapter was fantastic. You did a great job of clearing up any confusion that remained while also deepening the complexity of the characters. <br /><br />Good luck with the pillowbeak army, Shane!Chelsea Hutchinshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05942459374360222810noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4399739894737228221.post-6746505258437247992010-04-13T12:35:30.389-07:002010-04-13T12:35:30.389-07:00Do we know who was supposed to write for yesterday...Do we know who was supposed to write for yesterday (Monday)?Laurenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02521431244679926747noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4399739894737228221.post-56390229537702365772010-04-13T12:33:54.275-07:002010-04-13T12:33:54.275-07:00Oh wait, I think I'm chapter 20. My bad.Oh wait, I think I'm chapter 20. My bad.Shanehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02189007838085854770noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4399739894737228221.post-15520774247148183502010-04-13T10:38:59.744-07:002010-04-13T10:38:59.744-07:00Hmmm. This was a great chapter, Lauren. The excerp...Hmmm. This was a great chapter, Lauren. The excerpt from Sven was especially nice. I love that he's being plagued with becoming like Dr. Octopi. The explanations for Billy and Dr. Hans Gerstein were nice as well. <br /><br />I'm not really sure how to follow this. I believe we have four chapters, so I suppose I will work us toward that conclusion. Anyone for the arrival of the pillowbeak army?Shanehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02189007838085854770noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4399739894737228221.post-71170588708273794262010-04-12T20:43:56.127-07:002010-04-12T20:43:56.127-07:00WOW! I have been gasping in shock and suspense thr...WOW! I have been gasping in shock and suspense throughout! (Also, I think my mutterings have convinced mother that I am insane)<br />Clearing man gets a name, a congregation of characters begins, and doubt sets in for the siblings-- this was a very productive chapter.<br /><br />Like Grace I am excited to see things resolved and more than a bit nervous about writing the end!<br /><br />"For science!"Allanahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07328699352735442160noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4399739894737228221.post-25373653962691407672010-04-12T12:22:55.164-07:002010-04-12T12:22:55.164-07:00This was great. The explanations were definitely n...This was great. The explanations were definitely necessary, and I agree with everyone else that you did a wonderful job showing Billy and the clearing man's origins. Where is Dr. O in all this? He must have caught on that there are intruders. I'm pretty excited to see the end, but nervous because I have to write some of it!<br /><br />Lauren, you did a nice job creating suspense.Gracehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03671801744402409834noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4399739894737228221.post-1611249817301244902010-04-12T08:18:22.622-07:002010-04-12T08:18:22.622-07:00Very Nice, Lauren! It is a lot of explaining, but ...Very Nice, Lauren! It is a lot of explaining, but I think it as necessary and you did a good job with it. I like what you've done with Billy and Dr. Gerstein. It was time they were brought back into the story and explained. I also liked how you have Sven still questioning things. I tried to start it in my chapter, but I'm glad it was further developed here. Great job with creating some mystery and opening up for some suspense at the end!<br /><br />I think now we have set the stage for the climax to begin. All our characters have convened at the lab in some way. We two opposing sides, a conflict, and motive, Now it's time to start jumping into the climax.Aprilhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08470930605983257051noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4399739894737228221.post-29115342216305916062010-04-12T03:12:45.848-07:002010-04-12T03:12:45.848-07:00Very nice work. So glad that the Clearing Man fina...Very nice work. So glad that the Clearing Man finally has a name. I think your explanation definitely helped keep things from being clear-cut and black-and-white, so I really appreciate that. I am pleased with Billy's origin, and I'm liking Dr. Gerstein. But "return to Earth?" That's spooky. Wonder where he came from?<br /><br />-ScottScott Fentonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00163073245013948671noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4399739894737228221.post-27758433266380336392010-04-12T02:00:33.049-07:002010-04-12T02:00:33.049-07:00My goal for this chapter was to thicken the plot a...My goal for this chapter was to thicken the plot a little bit with the previous allegiance between Clearing Man and Dr. Octopi. I also tried to build up the doubt that Sven is struggling with by flashing to the scene with him in the cell. I left Billy's actions open for the next writers, but I went ahead and tried to explain Billy's origin. Sorry if this chapter seemed like a lot of explanation! I was really trying to help answer any unanswered questions before we move on to our climax and ending, as well as tie in other characters that we saw in previous chapters! Hope you all like it!Laurenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02521431244679926747noreply@blogger.com