tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4399739894737228221.post7389877703232091385..comments2010-05-03T13:45:16.635-07:00Comments on Junior Mint, Time Vortexes, & the Hadron Collider: Chapter 20: In which some die, some don't, and some come back from the dead.Unknownnoreply@blogger.comBlogger14125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4399739894737228221.post-62802791434211560022010-05-02T19:54:12.833-07:002010-05-02T19:54:12.833-07:00Love that Sven and Violet's relationship is fi...Love that Sven and Violet's relationship is finally good--Billy is amazing, obsessed with him! Happy you tied up the loose ends- great chapter!Rosemaryhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00032588273940565358noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4399739894737228221.post-12782060523878087342010-04-23T09:53:31.145-07:002010-04-23T09:53:31.145-07:00Wow.
Wow.
I thought it was extremely clever that ...Wow.<br /><br />Wow.<br />I thought it was extremely clever that you used Doppelsven to explain the oversight committed in my chapter... I forgot Sven was in shackles.<br /><br />Loved poor Dr. Nickel's demise.<br /><br />LOVED the action sequences, and Billy's Mongolian eulogy.<br /><br />Hooray for this novel.<br /><br />Katanas? Yeah, probably.Laudlin Preklopnikhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04655705369248092956noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4399739894737228221.post-77568915076591442172010-04-19T08:47:21.710-07:002010-04-19T08:47:21.710-07:00Awesome job Shane! I think that you did a wonderf...Awesome job Shane! I think that you did a wonderful job with the fight scene between Dr. O and Billy... the way you formatted it with the "CRASH"es was very appropriate and definitely gave the feel of him jumping around abrputly. Great work!<br />I also think you did a good job of tying up the relationship between Sven and Violet. It was very useful to show "fake Sven" and Violet's mistrust and confusion... it shows that she's grown to trust her brother more throughout their time together in the future. Overall, I think you did a wonderful job of giving further explanation while providing us with some much-needed action! :)Laurenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02521431244679926747noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4399739894737228221.post-66112343180152332522010-04-18T20:26:55.694-07:002010-04-18T20:26:55.694-07:00Grace- Yay! :D Red Lobster is the stuff.Grace- Yay! :D Red Lobster is the stuff.Scott Fentonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00163073245013948671noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4399739894737228221.post-85349885461245665242010-04-18T19:19:24.933-07:002010-04-18T19:19:24.933-07:00Really great chapter. You were able to creatively ...Really great chapter. You were able to creatively tie up all the loose ends and have a touching sibbling moment without slowing down any of the action. I love the death match and the direction you've put our story in!Melissa Hennessyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15400049674860842029noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4399739894737228221.post-57117637657381903312010-04-18T17:18:30.041-07:002010-04-18T17:18:30.041-07:00Awesome work!
Great job clearing up Sven and Vio...Awesome work! <br /><br />Great job clearing up Sven and Violet's long relationship. <br /><br />Also, good job with the kills. They didn't seem forced or anything. <br /><br />Now there's room for saving planet earth!Zack Thorntonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06608784553169401969noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4399739894737228221.post-64103060717711140722010-04-18T00:48:53.246-07:002010-04-18T00:48:53.246-07:00This was great! Good tying up. I'm also glad t...This was great! Good tying up. I'm also glad that you cleared up Sven & Violet's relationship. The ESP was a nice touch. I agree with Allana that you killed everyone nicely, and the fake Sven was also clever. I don't think Dr. O was very good at clones who knew what was going on, was he? <br /><br />You left the ending very open! I have ideas, and I'm going to have the chapter up by tomorrow evening (I have work). Sorry it's a day late! <br /><br />Scott-I'm tying some Red Lobster in for you.Gracehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03671801744402409834noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4399739894737228221.post-87117642729858878532010-04-17T19:48:37.253-07:002010-04-17T19:48:37.253-07:00Yeah, it was super late when I commented last nigh...Yeah, it was super late when I commented last night, so my thoughts were a little disjointed. :D<br />But yeah, I'm still loving it! I'm very impressed with everyone's work on this project. I'm pumped about the next chapter!Scott Fentonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00163073245013948671noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4399739894737228221.post-67075110261692827492010-04-17T15:59:14.498-07:002010-04-17T15:59:14.498-07:00Great work! I'm glad to see that you explained...Great work! I'm glad to see that you explained some things like that the alternate world is in the future and why Dr. Octopi can't work on the machine himself. Nice work in killing Dr. O; it was about time! Now we can focus on saving the planet since Violet and Sven's relationship is stable and Dr. O is dead.Aprilhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08470930605983257051noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4399739894737228221.post-55322226989130876012010-04-17T15:34:19.793-07:002010-04-17T15:34:19.793-07:00Fantastic job at tying everything up. I really lik...Fantastic job at tying everything up. I really liked having the Sven in the lab be "fake Sven." Great job!<br />Billy really becomes a nice hero here in the end, and I think Dr. Octopi and Nickel's deaths were appropriately hideous. Very Impressive!Chelsea Hutchinshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05942459374360222810noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4399739894737228221.post-13318533645830855382010-04-17T11:01:26.408-07:002010-04-17T11:01:26.408-07:00maybe in the past he is... ;)maybe in the past he is... ;)Shanehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02189007838085854770noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4399739894737228221.post-84697320992543926032010-04-17T07:36:03.668-07:002010-04-17T07:36:03.668-07:00I was really glad to see Sven and Violet's rel...I was really glad to see Sven and Violet's relationship coming to the forefront again. As Scott mentioned, the confession via ESP was a nice touch and completely in character.<br /><br />Your choices on who to kill and how they died were just right. The comic book feel was nicely executed and appropriate for our historic/futuristic fight. The gatling gun was perfect for Dr. O. And let me just say, Billy is AMAZING. If only he weren't significantly older...Allanahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07328699352735442160noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4399739894737228221.post-39581764447561118242010-04-16T22:53:55.659-07:002010-04-16T22:53:55.659-07:00Great chapter! I love the relationship between Sve...Great chapter! I love the relationship between Sven and Violet. Finally, things get resolved. Billy is freaking awesome. Good riddance, Octopi. <br /><br />I love the image of blood rushing like a geyser from fake-Sven's head. Just saying. <br /><br />Oh, Robert Nickel. For science? Crazy, delusional guy.<br /><br />I love Sven's admission via ESP. Very nice.Scott Fentonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00163073245013948671noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4399739894737228221.post-52125113303226436512010-04-16T16:58:52.104-07:002010-04-16T16:58:52.104-07:00Hey guys!
I tried to wrap most of the plot up, le...Hey guys!<br /><br />I tried to wrap most of the plot up, leaving the destruction of the Collider to Grace and the resolution to Allana. Octopi is dead (hooray!), but the story's not over yet!<br /><br />Grace, I tried to leave you an opener. Good luck!<br /><br />ShaneShanehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02189007838085854770noreply@blogger.com