tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4399739894737228221.post8666932427379086879..comments2010-05-03T13:45:16.635-07:00Comments on Junior Mint, Time Vortexes, & the Hadron Collider: Chapter 21: Junior Mint Shows Her WorthUnknownnoreply@blogger.comBlogger12125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4399739894737228221.post-57031450430179878292010-05-02T19:56:13.267-07:002010-05-02T19:56:13.267-07:00oh and very creative with the mirrorlings, added s...oh and very creative with the mirrorlings, added some more excitment to the fantasy (if that was even possible)Rosemaryhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00032588273940565358noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4399739894737228221.post-87208774028521813252010-05-02T19:55:22.571-07:002010-05-02T19:55:22.571-07:00Hahah this chapter made me laugh- the red lobster ...Hahah this chapter made me laugh- the red lobster cheesy biscuits haha. Well done!Rosemaryhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00032588273940565358noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4399739894737228221.post-48906323171587543642010-04-23T10:11:32.686-07:002010-04-23T10:11:32.686-07:00Great jorb for sure, Grace! The bench is back.
Sv...Great jorb for sure, Grace! The bench is back.<br /><br />Sven needs to practice his apparating.<br /><br />Dang those cheesy biscuits look delicious.<br /><br />Should've probably commented on this before I found out the cat survives, but I am glad to see so many elements from the original development stage resurfacing (Billy talking to animals, the bird and the baguette, time travel, etc). This was definitely a great set-up for the final chapter. Very denouementy.<br /><br />Mewww!Laudlin Preklopnikhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04655705369248092956noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4399739894737228221.post-3592021271380847512010-04-21T09:36:07.708-07:002010-04-21T09:36:07.708-07:00The fading away of the characters into purple smok...The fading away of the characters into purple smoke was awesome. <br /><br />And great job with the destruction of the machine. <br /><br />As Shane said above, I felt like everything that should have happened really happened here. <br /><br />You brought everything together, and did a great jorb. I can't wait to see the finished product.Zack Thorntonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06608784553169401969noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4399739894737228221.post-14952950698548026042010-04-19T13:32:22.929-07:002010-04-19T13:32:22.929-07:00This was a great chapter. Everything that should h...This was a great chapter. Everything that should have happened happened. The smoke and weirdly behaving inanimate objects were nice touches too, as well as the part-mirrorlings evaporating (but I agree with Scott, I don't really want them to). <br /><br />I feel like the events all happened very quickly though. You spend very little time elaborating on anything and the whole sequence seems like it could have taken place in one or two minutes instead of the hour or day it probably took.<br /><br />Also, I agree with April. Violet hates Sven again? That made me sad haha.<br /><br />Can't wait to see how it ends!Shanehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02189007838085854770noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4399739894737228221.post-32519826017834951182010-04-19T08:59:40.158-07:002010-04-19T08:59:40.158-07:00Grace--the cheesy biscuit is incredible!! So cleve...Grace--the cheesy biscuit is incredible!! So clever!<br />I really like how you brought back objects from the previous chapters like the mailbox and Sylvia's bench, and how you slowly started bringing in the purple fog. I think it gave a nice sense of deterioration.<br />Also, I really enjoyed Junior Mint (the cat) wanting to be a part of the plan and Billy being able to talk to her. Very creative!<br />Overall, I think you did a nice job of setting up our ending! Great work!Laurenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02521431244679926747noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4399739894737228221.post-2497831559232292182010-04-19T08:28:48.086-07:002010-04-19T08:28:48.086-07:00Great Job!!
Very clever using the cat and biscuit ...Great Job!!<br />Very clever using the cat and biscuit in place of the bird and baguette. I also like that you brought back a lot of things from earlier chapters. I thought the machine was destoried a little easily but I think it fit well for the story.Melissa Hennessyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15400049674860842029noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4399739894737228221.post-41409304345927828642010-04-19T06:53:13.851-07:002010-04-19T06:53:13.851-07:00Great Job, Grace! I really liked the way you tied ...Great Job, Grace! I really liked the way you tied in so many elements from other chapters like Red Lobster, the bench, and the mailbox, and Junior Mint the cat. I liked your use of humor, and I think you did a good job destroying the machine. <br />It was genius using a cheesy Red Lobster biscuit!Chelsea Hutchinshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05942459374360222810noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4399739894737228221.post-71569285651438153272010-04-19T04:28:44.559-07:002010-04-19T04:28:44.559-07:00Good job Grace. The fading out was done nicely and...Good job Grace. The fading out was done nicely and Dr. V seems like a pretty awesome particle physicist. I still think Junior Mint should have mewed "for science!" as she flew over the collider (but then again that might just be the caffeine talking)<br /><br />Any special requests for the end?Allanahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07328699352735442160noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4399739894737228221.post-35263038856394944832010-04-18T23:05:01.254-07:002010-04-18T23:05:01.254-07:00Yay! Loved it. I'm loving the Red Lobster tie-...Yay! Loved it. I'm loving the Red Lobster tie-in. The entire chapter just made me happy. Hooray for resolution! And hooray for such a weird group of people -- hopefully Junior Mint and Billy don't disappear! Anyway, great work!Scott Fentonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00163073245013948671noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4399739894737228221.post-69120380674073477202010-04-18T21:53:01.980-07:002010-04-18T21:53:01.980-07:00Good work with finally destroying the machine. I l...Good work with finally destroying the machine. I liked how you had the characters from the alternate universe start fading away into purple smoke! I also liked how Billy could talk to Junior Mint and how she was thrown into the collider. My only concern is that we have created a new tension between Violet and Sven that we have already resolved and that we must re-resolve in the last chapter. Overall nice work Grace! Can't wait to see the ending!Aprilhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08470930605983257051noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4399739894737228221.post-29621788839242054472010-04-18T21:11:09.201-07:002010-04-18T21:11:09.201-07:00I'm sorry about the last paragraph, it wouldn&...I'm sorry about the last paragraph, it wouldn't re-format.<br /><br />I hope I didn't make Violet too crazy about her cat.<br /><br />I didn't totally destroy the machine...but I don't think it was necessary, since in the news article the machine stopped working after the bread landed on it.Gracehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03671801744402409834noreply@blogger.com