Thursday, March 25, 2010

Chapter 3: Sylvia's Bench

Sven stared at the sky, taking in the greenish clouds swirling around the orange canopy like oil in water. Huh. He felt like he had just been through a toaster oven, and felt like he had the burns to prove it. The air was damp and heavy, and it tasted salty. And there was something else. What was that, leather? He looked to his right and noticed an ominously burning sofa. Ah.

He lay on his back in what felt like sand. Violet was leaning on a mailbox to his left. His eyes widened as he remembered what had happened. "I can't believe it," he said. "We actually passed through the portal!" He coughed. Then he coughed again. There seemed to be something stuck in his lung. He raised his head to look down at his chest and frowned.

Violet turned for a second look at her brother. She froze.

"Well that's problematic," said Sven. The leg of Sylvia's bench was protruding from his chest, the rest of the bench standing over him like a child's fort.

"Really? I don't know," said Violet. "There's just a bench in your chest." Sven was busy examining the leg in his lung. His hands ran over the metal and the skin around it.

"Amazing! There's no blood or anything--well, except what was already there," he said, as though Violet wasn't there, "I must have, uh, portal-ed? I don't know--"

"Very precise, Mr. Scientist. Maybe 'landed?'" Violet said.

"It's never happened before," said Sven, glaring at her. "I must have landed inside it. The bench was already here, so the portal must have broken down our matter to bring us here and since I was technically not solid, I--"

Violet took Sven's fascination at his predicament as a chance to take in her surroundings. They were on a beach of some kind, judging by the sand beneath her feet. Scattered around the sand were a few other items: a lamp post, a hubcap, a shrub, a smoking BMW, and the occasional body part on a small red patch of sand. "Others must have come through," thought Violet.

She looked inland. There was a forest that grew up from the edge of the sand and continued past where she could see. The trees were strange, as if they had been uprooted and placed back in the ground upside-down, but continued to grow just the same. The "branches" were at the bottom, but above ground like the roots of a mangrove tree. And the "roots" were at the top. There was no undergrowth. Instead, vibrant mosses and bushes hung between the root-like treetops, creating a canopy of multicolored greenery. Movement caught her eye, and she saw a small spherical creature swinging by two monkey-ish tails from the dangling growth. Several smaller ones followed it, strung together like monkeys-in-a-barrel, making squeaking noises and bumping each other playfully.

"How precious," she said. "Sven, did you see the trees? They're neat." But he was still babbling to himself.

"--so if I would have landed standing up, my legs would be through the seat. This is fantastic! When I find Robert, we can--"

Violet decided to leave her brother to his science, so she walked toward the ocean. The water offshore was flat and deeply blue, like a crayon, and extended for--

Violet paused. A wall of water stretched for miles above the surface, and infinitely in either direction, just a few hundred yards out from the beach. At first, she thought she would run. Being hit by a tidal wave would be an excellent way to be welcomed into their new Wonderland. After a bit of staring and wondering about Sven (he couldn't run far with a bench in his chest, and it would do nothing for his buoyancy either), she began to wonder why they hadn't yet been crushed by the wall of water. But the wall of water--apparently that's what it was--didn't move at all.

"Huh," she said to herself. She went back to Sven and plopped down on the bench. He jerked and
began coughing.

"--so the matter must have been-GAH! Gently, Klutzor," he said between hacks. She hated that
name and he knew it, so he made sure to use it with regularity.

"When the guys back at CERN hear about this..." Sven hesitated and glanced at Violet. "What?"
she said. He never talked about his work. It was always "top secret" this and "top secret" that,
and "it's classified." Sometimes she thought that he just liked annoying her with his self-important
silence.

"It's nothing," he said. Violet sighed.

"Do you remember when mom and dad used to take us to the beach?" she asked, looking out
over the water. Sven's eyes darkened. Their parents had divorced five years ago, and Sven didn't
try to hide his anger at the whole ideal.

"Just drop it."

Violet sat in silence as her brother lay stewing in the sand with a bench leg in his lung.

"I can help him if you'd like."

Violet jerked in surprise. A boy was standing behind them. He was wearing a pair of ragged cargo
shorts and no shirt. He was a bit dirty, and his hair was long and unkempt. She hadn't heard him
approach.

"Careful kid, you just about made her lay a chocolate egg, if you know what I mean." Sven looked at Violet with a mischievous smile, then turned his gaze back to the newcomer with wide eyes. "Did you come through the portal as well?"

The stranger smiled. He looked young to Violet, probably around sixteen.

"Yes and no," he said. Violet noticed age in his voice. The boy turned and looked at Sven.

"Let's get that bench out of your chest," he said. Sven looked hesitant.

"Look kid, unless you're a surgeon..."

"Don't worry, I know what I'm doing," said the stranger. He knelt by Sven. Violet frowned as he placed a hand on Sven's chest and one on the bench. He frowned for a moment, then stood up.

"I don't know if groping me did anything, but look, if you know any scientists that came through from our world, could you find them? My partner came through about half an hour ago. His name is Robert Nickel. He would have been bleeding from the stump where his hand used to be."

"I met him," the boy said, but didn't elaborate. He closed his eyes, and a ripping sound startled Violet. Sven cursed. That same burning sugar cookie smell was back.

"You can move now," said the stranger. Sven looked down at his chest to find the bench removed completely and his chest back to normal. He looked up.

"How did you--"

"Not right now. Now, before I go, listen very carefully. The people that took your friend Nickel are heading back to the City. You cannot be here when the second patrol arrives. It wouldn't necessarily be unpleasant being in their custody, but you need free range to do what you need to. Do not get caught under any circumstances. Head along the shoreline that way." He pointed down the beach to the left. "If they catch up to you, lose them in the forest. Eventually you will find a clearing just inside the treeline."

Sven's head hurt. "I hope you're remembering all this, Vi." She nodded.

"In this clearing, there will be a building. Inside this building is a man that can help you. He will ask you this: 'How about a nightcap?' And you will respond 'Do you have one in blue?' He will tell you everything you need to know."

"But why are the people from this 'City' chasing us?" Violet asked. "Why did they take Sven's partner?"

"I really have no idea," said the boy. "Anything else?"

"Yeah," said Sven, rubbing his chest. "Who am I thanking for the whole bench thing?"

"My name isn't really important right now." The boy shrugged. "But I guess you can call me Billy."

"So what about--" began Violet.

But Billy wasn't listening. He turned and sprinted toward one of the particularly large trees. He leaped onto a low branch (or root, Violet wasn't sure), and sprinted toward the trunk. He jumped at it, pushed off higher, and swung into a double back-flip from a hanging root (or branch, it was all a little confusing). Before he could land on the ground, a hole ripped in the air beneath him, swallowing him up. And then Billy was gone. Violet just stared.

"Was all that necessary?" said Sven.

"Like you don't show off at all," Violet said.

"Do you think we should do what he said?"

"I don't see why not."

Sven clapped his hands. "Well, it'll be a lot easier going without seventy pounds of bench in my chest. I wish Robert could have seen that. The studies we could have done would have made--"

But Violet was already walking. He stopped talking and ran to catch up with her.

"Hey, Vi, wait!" He drew up next to her and slowed to her pace. "Do you think it's dangerous here? I mean, there could be all kinds of stuff from our world here, like lions and sharks and things. AND--" His face brightened. "What if there are indigenous species? There could be millions of discoveries to be made!"

She thought of the swinging creature in the forest. Her reading on the food chain came back to her. There was always a predator.

"That may be, Sven. That may be," she said, and wrapped her arms around herself. She suddenly felt unprotected.

They walked on in silence for a while.

12 comments:

  1. Shane, I like it. Especially the part about the mangrove trees, they are a nice image. Oh! oh! and the the burnt sugar smell being the separation of people from objects is amazing!

    I am pretty nervous about trying to follow everyone's amazing chapters....ideas for a "heart" are appreciated!

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  2. Great job!! I love how you encorporated things from previous chapters and the whole bench being in Sven's chest was surprising and wonderful!
    I love the dry humor in the dialogue and awesome job introducing Billy and the new world! They're both so interesting! An the new plot twist of Robert Nickles being captured is so exciting!!!

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  3. Dude, this was a great chapter. You really did a good job tying things together from previous chapters as well. But, you didn't rely on those before you(as we see in the introduction of the new world/Billy) Also, Robert Nickles...a whole new element. Great job!

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  4. Yeah, nicely done. Billy totally creeped me out. I love how whimsical this chapter is...particularly the leg of the bench and the bit about the nightcaps. Also, great imagery with the water and the forest.

    I'm still hoping to include Red Lobster and Dan Brown in Chapter 5. Allana, make it happen! ;) We'll find the "heart." It's at Red Lobster.

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  5. Great chapter! I really like the way you used Melissa's ideas in your chapter and explained so much. Very creative! I also liked the introduction of Billy, and the night cap code.

    Allana, maybe Sven's issues with the divorce could have something to do with the heart of the story. Maybe he distracts himself with science and ignores his family, or something like that. You're chapter will be great, I'm sure.

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  6. I'm sorry about the weird spacing everyone, I don't know what happened lol.

    Thank you all for your comments. I was a little hesitant to add in Billy at first, but I figured that Trent's shaman idea would be the perfect way to give our lost little characters some immediate direction without them like just finding something.

    Scott - I actually have tried to set you up for Red Lobster haha. That's what I meant the building to be. I really hope that by doing that I didn't restrict Allana too much.

    Allana - I look forward to seeing what you do next!

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  7. Loved it! You did a good job of creating a setting. This will be easy for the next person to follow up on since you have set up a plot nicely. The further characterization of Violet and Sven's sibling rivalry was also well done. I really liked how you let bizarre things happen, like the bench in Sven's chest and the boy appearing and disappearing, but you gave the reader a sense of "this is okay, just go with it" like we talked about in class. I also enjoyed the links! Well done!

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  8. The setting reminds me a lot of The Phantom Tollbooth. The trees and the giant walls of water are cool, and I love the junk from Earth that's strewn across the landscape. And alien monkeys, fun!

    My favorite element of this chapter is that the shaman character sending on our characters on some sort of quest, but there's also some strange dystopian element to the society. Very creepy that Billy says their custody isn't unpleasant but they must be avoided at all costs, and that they're sending patrols, like they're Brave New World Vortex Nazis or something. I'm excited to see what Nickel is up to... I imagine he'll be off his rocker by the time we catch up with him and he's gone through all of that mind-altering future fascist vortex therapy that his captors will no doubt subject him to... - Trent

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  10. this chapter was exciting! I loved the bench in his chest. Totally unpredictable. I like the details you set up for the world...this is a pretty good basis to build from. I like the Billy character..I like the danger suggested by the capture...it's great!

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  11. Shane--I think you did a wonderful job building the suspense in this chapter while really adding in nice literary details. Your dialogue, for one, was wonderful--I loved the dry wit! I want to second what April said--you also did a fantastic job about not questioning the setting and having the characters "go with it." The descriptive details were very vivid as well... the mangrove trees, walls of water, and even the color of the sky were all wonderful additions. My favorite part of this whole chapter was Billy and the people in this "City." How creepy/awesome was that!? I look forward to learning Billy's story and hearing more about this city! Great job!

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  12. I LOVED THIS!! It was so magical and imaginative! I want someone to make a movie of this so I can see it with my own eyes. Wonderful idea with the upside down trees and the random guy Billy disappearing by being swallowed by a black hole type of thing. The setting is really key here and truly helps the reader form a wonderful vision of this story. The relationship between Sven and Violet is funny, I like how easily their dialogue between one another flows- very believable. You have a wonderful sense of imagination, and cleverly make it seem realistic

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